Each year, the crime rate increase. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity.

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The number of crimes across the world is increasing rapidly. The world is

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witnessing a variety of crimes with increased technologies. On a serious note, criminals are opting to use technologies to attack the innocent. Reasons for these atrocities and corrective measures are to be discussed in detail. The prime reasons behind committing any crime, as described by the police force are momentary reactions to situations like greed, poverty, discrimination, personal desires etc, and many more.

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, financial scandals are prevailing in the present day in every country and the sole reason behind

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is greed. With technological advancements like digital currency, the greedy are targeting innocent, uneducated and illiterate citizens. Adding to greed, social discrimination is

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impacting the lawlessness being committed. The powerful are suppressing the weaker sections of society to stabilize their hold on the community. As patience

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has a threshold and once the suppression exceeds the limits, the momentary reaction flushes out in the form of criminal activities. Examples of these kinds of social evils are prevailing even in developed countries in terms of racism. The responsibility to control the criminal attitude among the citizens lies with everyone including the government and schools. Conducting Yoga classes, encouraging meditation, and imparting devotional paths among individuals, can increase the levels of self-control and teaching equality is the key to reducing the psychic attitude. Universities and schools should

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make it mandatory to teach good habits to children to guide them to walk away from becoming future criminals.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

252 words

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Fully explain your ideas

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