A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: • describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team • summaries the benefits of paying for the concerts • say how you think the company should spend the money

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letter to share my thoughts about your sponsorship in our community.

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, thank you for your decision, it will be beneficial in any circumstances. There are 2 basketball teams in our public school yet they don'

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have enough opportunity to train themselves. Those kids are incredibly talented and if they have changed as much as private school students, they would consider being a player in the future.

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, our community doesn'

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gather up often because the basic needs are very expensive and people couldn'

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spend money on social events. 2 open-air concerts would be relaxing for everybody as we don'

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afford a ticket. I think you should invest money in children's basketball teams. I don'

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have any children but I know they are our future and it would be a great asset to improve sports teams. Yours faithfully, Elif Beyza Önder

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