Nowadays because of digital technology, it is possible for not only studios but also individuals to produce their own films. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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The phenomenon of information technology development pace is faster and faster in the modern world and lending to a myriad of social media that allow the public to share their own movie has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as

people

's views on

this

issue in question may be, I believe that its advantages outweigh the disadvantages to the human community. Regarding the disadvantages of digital technology to us, probably the most significant one is that

people

spend too much time in the virtual world

such

as Facebook and IG in turn they start to ignore the things that actually happen in

the

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reality.

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, many

people

have the

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of surfing on the internet because it has a diversity of information and

provided

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the latest updated data.

Therefore

, they have less time to communicate with their friend and family.

As a result

, the gap between

people

becomes bigger than before. Despite the aforementioned disadvantages, I still believe

this

will bring us more benefits than drawbacks. Of all the advantages of new tech to humans, probably the first pop-up in my mind is that the public can share their

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through the internet without limitation by the policies of the studios.

For example

, the film will become more creative and diverse.

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is why

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become one of the most familiar media.

Moreover

, those popular movies will be

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among folk as a topic, and more importantly, it can help to communicate with someone you may not know like a new colleague. It is

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to meet some new friends. Under

this

line of thinking, it seems to me that social media as a new technology can bring us more entertainment and its topicality has the potential to overcome the drawback.

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Focus on addressing all parts of the task prompt. Make sure to present your opinion clearly and provide relevant supporting points.

coherence and cohesion

Your essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Ensure that you introduce the topic, state your opinion, and provide a summary or conclusion in the end.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

294 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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