Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals;during festival periods,people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Festivals are meant to encourage harmony in society and concurrently, they act as a medium of expression of one's cultural heritage. There is an opinion that celebrations of festivities have become more self-centric and personal, than promoting collective enjoyment.

However

I strongly disagree with

this

view and my essay will rationalize the point, with relevant examples.

Firstly

, owing to global migration, people live in different societies apart from their own. It can hardly be overestimated, that finding a

similarly

minded group, allowing collective observance, may not be always possible or feasible.

For example

, my Indian friend in rural Sweden, celebrates Diwali,with his American friends in a local Mexican restaurant. Apparently, in a narrower sense, it's a solo observance,

however

, in a broader sense, it's collective, involving several people across religious lines which enhances the spirit of the bonding.

Secondly

, if we see festivals today, it can truly be said that the same is being observed in collective gayety across the religious divide . To exemplify, religious commemorations like Durga puja, Ganesh puja or eid in India are celebrated with mass fervour, involving all sections of the society irrespective of religious lines.

Furthermore

, it is the collective spirit ,which not only makes it more memorable and commendable but

also

acts as a cohesive bond to different sections of society. Relevant examples can be cited in Kolkata, India, where the whole city, irrespective of religion gathers, at Park Street to enjoy Christmas eve. Conclusively it can be said that the opinion of selfish enjoyment of festivities does not appear tenable and worthy. The sacrosanct fiesta continues to be observed, not only in collective spirit and mood but

also

enhancing the purpose of the same.

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Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals;during festival periods,people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people buy local food?

In some countries, it is illegal for employers to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think it is a negative or positive development?

One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

In their advertisement businesses emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this?do you think it is positive and negative development?