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Some people believe that companies should manufacture products that last for a long time. Others feel that emphasis should be placed on producing goods that are cheap. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some argue that manufacturers should produce
goods
 that can be used for a long period,
while
 others argue that manufacturers should prioritize
goods
 that can be sold for a low price.
Although
products
 that can
last
 for a long time can give buyers
that
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the
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 value of their
money
, I believe that it is better to produce
goods
 with low
price
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prices
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 because can help consumers save
money
.
To begin
 with, others may prefer
products
 that can be used for a long time.
This
 is because they think that they can give them the value of their
money
. They can
use
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be
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 them for years because they are made from quality material and
was
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were
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 meticulously made.
For instance
, Hermes bags
costs
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cost
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 millions of pesos because it was made from quality leather. Most people who can afford them are millionaires.
However
, the
high
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apply
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majority of
population
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the population
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are
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is
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 only from
middle class
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middle-class
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 and low-income families.
On the other hand
, producing
goods
 that are affordable can be appealing to consumers because it
does
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apply
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not only
give
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gives
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 them more
option
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options
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,
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apply
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 but most importantly
help
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helps
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 them save
money
.
This
 is especially beneficial in today's economy because the cost of living is extremely expensive and
ones
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one's
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 salary is not enough to live comfortably. Cheap
goods
 can help them survive in
this
 thriving economy.
For instance
,
instead
 of buying a $3 pocket of pasta, buyers can choose one that only costs $1 but
taste
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tastes
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 exactly the same.
Therefore
, affordable
products
 can help people to save more. In conclusion,
although
 producing
goods
 that can
last
 for a long period sounds can give individuals
the
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apply
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value
of
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for
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 their
money
, I believe that manufacturing
products
 that are affordable
are
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is
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 more beneficial to most population.
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Task Response
To improve your Task Achievement score, ensure that your essay fully addresses all parts of the task. Your essay should clearly discuss both views before presenting your own opinion. Integrate more detailed examples that specifically relate to the advantages and disadvantages of each viewpoint to strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
To enhance Coherence and Cohesion, aim for a more structured organization of ideas. Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to smoothly transition between sentences and paragraphs. Ensure that paragraphs are clearly defined, each with a single main idea that is thoroughly developed.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • disposable goods
  • economic benefits
  • frequent replacements
  • technological adaptation
  • manufacturing affordability
  • environmental responsibility
  • longevity
  • minimize costs
  • wider society
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