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Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

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Nowadays, in cosmopolitan cities, most
people
 do not recognise their
neighbours
.
This
 issue is caused by
a
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busy lifestyles and poor connections, and populations should take attention to what kind of
people
 live nearby them so they can make some effort to develop their environment. About 30 years ago, the majority of
people
 used to know their
neighbours
, and communicate with them more frequently to compare with the current situation. Most
people
 have become getting full attention in their careers, so they usually spend their time at their offices or outdoor activities, and arrive at their home to just relax and be with their family. Due to their busy lifestyle, they do not have a chance to communicate and face their
neighbours
, and
also
 the
community
 of their building is deficient to make connections among their residents To fix
this
 problem, they should organise neighbourhood clubs or some
community
 groups to talk with their
neighbours
 more frequently. In
this
 kind of group, probably they can arrange meetings every month or week, so they can discuss and resolve the difficulties that are happening in their environment, and help each other which leads to more close connections between residents. Knowing about their
neighbours
 helps communicate to make strong relations it leads to living them comfortable and safe. To conclude, our lifestyle has changed a lot more than we thought, and it takes us to an unlively and boring life. Having a good
community
 has plenty of advantages that make us more lively.
Therefore
, we ought to alter
this
 kind of
community
 problem before it falls deep.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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