Some people think that lawbreakers should be sent to prison. However, others think that better talents among those should be made to work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is controversial whether lawbreakers should be sent to prison or law.
it
is better to choose the talented Correct word choice
if it
crowed
for good causes and make them productive. Correct your spelling
crowd
This
essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail. From my prospective
, Correct your spelling
perspective
lawbreaker
should serve the best for the vicious Fix the agreement mistake
lawbreakers
crime
they have committed, there should be not be
any violation ofChange the verb form
not be
Add an article
the
However
, isolating them form
the nation can be beneficial for the country’s safety. They should receive adequate punishments and realize their faults Correct your spelling
from
of
committing a Change preposition
for
crime
before they are released in
Change preposition
into
the
society. Correct article usage
apply
Otherwise
those wrongdoers will commit more Add a comma
Otherwise,
crime
as a habit. Some criminals even with rehabilitation Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
center
and jail time turn towards Fix the agreement mistake
centers
misconducts
. Fix the agreement mistake
misconduct
Nevertheless
criminals with professional talents or who have the potential for improvement should be granted an opportunity to work under imprisonment, so when they are released, they have plenty of skills and expertise Add a comma
Nevertheless,
further
they can start Rephrase
apply
there
Replace the word
their
life
again in a better way. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
For
example
they can easily do handyman jobs like plumbing, construction , Add a comma
example,
Correct word choice
and electrician
electrician
, and rather Fix the agreement mistake
electricians
chose
to study and Wrong verb form
choose
became
professionals like lawyers, doctors and many more, they can earn and make Wrong verb form
become
living
after having the knowledge for it. In Correct article usage
a living
my
conclusion, criminal should be trained under imprisonment forCorrect pronoun usage
apply
their
better future Change the word
a
also
to not fall back in
another Change preposition
into
crime
and other
should be disciplined Fix the agreement mistake
others
accordingly
. For the closure, equal rights should be presented for type
of Correct determiner usage
each type
criminals
.Fix the agreement mistake
criminal
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion