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Some people believe that lowering the speed limit will lead to maximum road safety. Other people believe that there are many other ways to improve road safety. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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The table provides information about
population
 figures in five countries in
2003
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the 2003
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 year and predicts
this
one
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apply
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from 2025 and 2050 years.
Population
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The population
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 is measured in
millions
. Overall, there is a tendency
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for that
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that
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the
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population
 in
Indonesia
 to be more than other countries. The lowest
population
 in 2003 was in Argentina. It was just 34 million.
Population
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The population
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 reached 48
millions
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million
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 and 54
millions
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million
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 in
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Korea and Italy
by
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in
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same
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the same
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 year.
Population
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The population
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 in
Indonesia
 was significantly high and amounted to about 240
millions
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million
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.
Population
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The population
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 will be increased in Argentina,
Indonesia
 and Korea by 2025.
However
, it will fall in Italy and become 47
millions
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million
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.
Number
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A number
The number
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 of people in Italy will be decreased
on
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by
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 2
millions
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million
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 by 2050. Huge growth will be in
Indonesia
 and
population
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the population
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 will reach 312
millions
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million
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 by 2050. It will be 62 by the same year, which is more than in the past. The
population
 figures in Korea will stay the same in 2050
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