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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree and disagree with this statement?

#government #money #railways #roads
Nowadys
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Nowadays
, there is a
debat
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debit
debate
debt
 associated with governments should invest significant money
on
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 railways rather than roads. In
may
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 opinion, developing railways can help to resolve
trafic
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traffic
issue
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issues
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 and it can lead to individuals moving
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to rurals
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rurals
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rural
area
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 without any concern about their commute. It is my view that governments should invest more money in railways
due to
 encourage
people
 to commute
with
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by
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train
 and it can lead to
reduce
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amount
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 of traffics.
Moreover
, it can encourage
population
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 to
living
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 in the
suburbs
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 area and commute
with
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train
.
Furthere
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Furthermore
, using trian can
decreses
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decreases
decrease
 the proportion of time
cummuters
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commuters
 spend to reach their destination. In
addittion
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addition
, fares can be
great
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 source of revenue for
government
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the government
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 so they should invest in
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the infarstructure
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infarstructure
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infrastructure
 of
train
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trains
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 and public
trasports
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transports
transport
.
Also
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 trains are
the
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an
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 environmentally
friendy
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friendly
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 form of
trasport
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transport
 so using
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the train
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train
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trains
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 can help to protect
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the environments
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environments
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.
In contrast
, a group of
people
 claim that if
govrnments
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governments
 spend more money to develop roads, It can lead to
reduce
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reducing
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 the number of
accident
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accidents
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 that happened because of bad road
condition
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conditions
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.
Moreover
, It can decline
amount
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the amount
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 of traffic in the city.
However
, I do not find the argument convincing as developing roads condition can not reduce
traffic’s
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 size
instead
 it causes to more
people
 use privet cars and it can lead to
increase
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the
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 number of accidents too. In conclusion, I believe,
government
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the government
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 should use a strategy to encourage
people
use
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to use
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 other sorts of transport
such
 as trains and buses and
airplante
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aeroplane
aeroplanes
 to protect
environment
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the environment
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 and
also
 using
train
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trains
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 can reduce
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the congestetion
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congestetion
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congestion
of
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city
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the city
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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