Some believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country or region. Others believe that is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life. Discuss both views and give your opinion

It is arguably believed that nowadays
people
tend to be rather reluctant
of upholding
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long-established
traditions
.
Also
, there is a considerable number of
people
who believe instilling deep-rooted
cultures
and
traditions
is vital.
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essay will examine both views dividedly and
argues
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in
the
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favor of the latter.
To begin
with, Considering the fact
the
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culture and
traditions
can be fluid and forever changing, it is inevitable to give in to the vanishing of some.
However
, it
also
appears that in the modern
world
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world,
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people
don’t appear as willing to preserve
well established
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cultures
as they used to do ages ago and
that is
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to
fostering
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of youth culture. Seemingly, the newly established
cultures
developed by new generations hold
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substantial sway over how
traditions
are rarely kept.
Therefore
, the initiating gap between the set of values
people
are currently undergoing is rather unacceptable and inconvenient to adopt and is potentially raising conflict.
However
,
cultures
instill an invisible bonding that ties
people
together,
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and bring
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brings
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joy, uniformity and harmony to
people
’s lives which if eliminated fully, can lay stages for cultural diversity, negligence and division.
For instance
, the annual ceremonies like
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or Christmas
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significant since
it
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spreads
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limitless joy and
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away despair of the mundane. In my perspective, making
realistic
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effort to uphold cultural values and
traditions
is crucial.
However
, exhorting society to stick rigidly to it is questioning
people
’s
value
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and
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Thus
, the entire meaning of tradition falls under question and preserving cultural myths and ancient ethics just for the sake of preserving them will not be promising.
To conclude
, even though there are several aspects in which we can all agree is absolutely vital to keep
traditions
alive, forcefully and prejudicially tying ourselves to them is not the answer
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