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Some people believe that sports create peace in world. Do you agree or disagree with ?

#people #sports #peace #world
football is a sport popular in many
countries
 that will be making restfulness in the earth.
Firstly
, before the
world
 cup has familiar many years ago when I was a child I saw the events very fantastic so the name organization Fifa made the
competition
 once every four years and the purpose of the event has made peace in the globe because a
country
 will join a contest to win or lose which is developing collaboration through sports.
secondly
, Europe and Latin America are acquire-win with the word cup match so the moment all of the
countries
 will gather the one
country
 where are know each other
such
 as culture, different religions, and separate languages it will make unity in the
world
 and harmony.
Lastly
,
competition
 providers'
countries
 usually make a song
such
 as Waka-Waka and others for giving sent of
tranquility
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tranquillity
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 so it is to create a big effect the society.
moreover
, every play soccer will bring the national anthem so a team could sing a song before playing so which makes another
country
 will appreciate different
countries
 with a song. In conclusion, the
world
 cup is momentum for every
country
 to know another
country
for instance
 religions, culture, and different languages
so
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which
are
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competition
 by soccer creating
peaceful
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peace
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 in the
world
, because all of the
countries
 will come to one
country
 to join a
competition
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fostering
  • unity
  • cross-cultural understanding
  • historical moments
  • political and cultural divides
  • nationalism
  • division
  • sports diplomacy
  • peacekeeping
  • diplomatic efforts
  • grassroots
  • community cohesion
  • prevent conflict
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