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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
It is a common fact that migrating to a
country
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 a different
language
 result to
sever
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issue
 in social and
practicle
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practical
 context. The essay is
indended
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intended
 to explain my view which
is agree
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on
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 the
satement
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statement
 emphasis basically on public communication and cultural
adoptation
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adaptation
 in
new
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country
.
Firstly
, the major
issue
encounter
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 by the migrant is
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the difficultity
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difficultity
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difficulty
 to share ideas with the local people.
As a result
, the foreigner may struggle in travelling by public transport,
buying
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 things or entering
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public places. As
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axample
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example
, if an international student wants to find a specific place in the university,
assistance
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of
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the
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an
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english
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 speaking friend or
prior
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a prior
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 search
of
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place
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a place
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 on the map
are
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 needed because less or no support he/ she can expect
at
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on
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 the road.
Therefore
, it is important to be prepared or be familiar with the
language
befor
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before
 you arriving
the
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a
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 specific
country
.
Secondly
, the practical
issue
 in
adopting
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adapting
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to
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an alien
culture
. For
an
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instance, the way that
welcome
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by
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Japanese
are
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 different from other Asians, if tourists travel
such
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to such
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 a
country
 with no prior understanding of their
welcoming
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, communicating,
food
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and food
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 serving or they will embarrass at a public gathering.
This
 is a detrimental
issue
 that a traveller
encounter
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 without proper planning
to
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in
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new
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country
 with a different
culture
. In conclusion, migrating to a new
country
 with different
culture
 and
language
 requires
advance
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 planning and practice of
new
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the new
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culture
 and
language
 to avoid the social and practical issues
at
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 the new land.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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