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You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter: Explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum Describe some skills and qualities that would be useful Give some details of when would you be available for work

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my interest in undertaking voluntary work at your museum. I have always been passionate about history and culture, and I believe that working at the museum would allow me to contribute meaningfully
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 expanding my knowledge. Being surrounded by valuable
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artefacts
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artifacts
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 and sharing their stories with visitors would be a truly rewarding experience for me. I possess several skills and qualities that I believe would make me a suitable candidate. I have strong communication skills and enjoy interacting with people of different ages and backgrounds. My background in education has
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 enabled me to explain information clearly and engagingly, which I feel would be helpful when guiding visitors or assisting with exhibitions.
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, I am
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, reliable, and have a keen eye for detail, which would be beneficial in handling museum materials responsibly. Regarding my availability, I am free during weekends and in the afternoons on weekdays after 2 p.m. I am flexible and willing to adjust my schedule
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 the museum’s requirements. I would be grateful if you could consider my application for voluntary work, and I look forward to the opportunity of contributing to your esteemed institution. Yours faithfully, Nimra Pervaiz

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Add a bit more detail on exact tasks you can do at the museum, such as guiding tours or helping with displays.
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Mention any past work or voluntary tasks to show fit.
structure
Close with a line about what you hope to gain or how you will follow up.
tone
Keep sentences short and clear to stay on simple words.
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Check subject-verb and pronoun use for safety.
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Clear reason to join and what you bring to the museum.
tone
Polite and formal tone with proper closing.
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Well ordered: motivation, skills, and time.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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