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Some people are happy to spend their whole life living in the same area. Others prefer to live in many different places in their lifetime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
people
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 have the freedom to choose where they live. Some prefer to stay in their beloved
house
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 for the rest of their lives;
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, others enjoy nomadic living.
This
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 essay will examine both views and elaborate on why I think that living permanently in a designated place is more beneficial compared to moving constantly.
Firstly
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, living within one community for a long period of time can present a benefit,
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, stronger
relationship
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relationships
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 with other
people
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 living in the same
area
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. When a neighbourhood
bond
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bonds
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 together, they will form a support system.
People
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 in the
area
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 will help and support each other to achieve a harmonious community.
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, permanently staying in one
house
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 can bring benefits financially.
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, there is investment value in buying a
house
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. The longer you own the
house
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, the higher the value of your
house
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 as residential and land properties raise
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in value each year.
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,
people
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 who are living in different areas are exposed to a variety of cultures. Each
area
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 will present them
a
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unique culture and there are going to be new experiences and knowledge to be explored and learned
everytime
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.
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,
this
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 way of living can be costly, as there
is
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 always travel costs and other uncertainties. There
is
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 no set expenses each month as every
area
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 has its own challenges, and there will be unforeseen circumstances happening occasionally. In my opinion, permanently living in a single
area
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 is a far more safer and beneficial option. Community support is essential for families and investment can bring a significant impact
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 financial well-being.
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 of constantly moving to live in different areas, perhaps occasional travel can be an alternative option to gain new experiences.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sense of familiarity
  • Belonging
  • Community
  • Social connections
  • Local environment
  • Resources
  • Limited exposure
  • Different cultures
  • Experiences
  • Stagnation
  • Complacency
  • Personal growth
  • Development
  • Diverse cultures
  • Perspectives
  • Adaptability
  • Flexibility
  • Stability
  • Roots
  • Long-lasting relationships
  • Adjustment
  • New environments
  • Balanced approach
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