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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #teenagers #community #work #time #benefit
Teenager
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The teenager
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 is one of the most valuable age groups
in
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 respect to
upgrade
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the
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social values as
teenagers
 are
future
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the future
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 of
country’s
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the country’s
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 development. In
this
 essay, I will explore that
teenagers
 should do
community
work
 for free in their leisure
time
 which would ultimately
beneficial
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 for both the
teenagers
 and the
community
. I believe it is everyone’s duty to do
work
 for the betterment of society.
However
, other than
teenagers
, other age groups are quite busy
in
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 jobs and
family’s
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 responsibilities,
usually
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 they do not have much
time
 to spend on
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community
work
.
On the other hand
,
teenagers
 have enough
time
 to explore new ideas and
work
 on them to help the
community
 and as
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a teenager
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teenagers
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teenager
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 they do not have
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financial issues as they have their parent’s support, so they can
work
 for free easily.
Along with
 that, their
work
 must be appreciated with
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time
 so they can keep themselves motivated to help the
community
.
Moreover
,
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community related
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work
 would help them in the growth of their career because they will get a chance to learn plenty of new things as they have started working from a young age. So by the
time
, they are adults they would have enough knowledge about
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society and most importantly, they would get a chance to interact with different
people
 which could lead them to understand
different
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kind
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kinds
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 of
people
.
Additionally
, they can develop the confidence to talk to
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people
 without any hesitation. Despite these facts, many
people
 believe that
teenagers
 should be paid well for any kind of
work
 they do because no
work
 should be done for free. It is
valid
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point
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 up to some extent, but when we look at
bigger
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 picture it ends up in unhealthy
competitions
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competition
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 and politics among
teenagers
. In conclusion, I believe it should be
individual’s
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an individual’s
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 choice whether they want to
work
 for free or want to charge for doing any
community
work
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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