Some people say that education and heath care should be the responsibility of the goverment but other thinks that it is the responsibility of the individuals themseves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There's no denying that

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staying healthy is one of the most crucial aspects of every developed and civilized society. It is believed by some that the authorities should be responsible for

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education and healthcare

while

others suppose that

this

reposibility

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responsibility

fall

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upon the shoulders of the

indivisuals

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individuals

individual

.

This

essay will discuss both sides of the coin and argue in

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of the latter. On the one hand, the

goverment

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government

should increase

their

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budget for the academic and

health

sectors.

This

is important because, not only are the amounts of

health

facilites

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facilities

are

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low, but

also

there has been a huge shortage in the number of life science

professional

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in the past decades.

As a consequence

of

this

, if a child was born with a neurological abnormality, he will

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to travel to another city and sometimes abroad in order to find a good and experienced neurosurgeon to perform a

suitalbe

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suitable

surgery. In short, more money should be spent by the

goverment

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government

to build more hospitals and train more physicians and professionals.

On the other hand

, the general populations are

resposible

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responsible

for

thier

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their

general

health

.

This

can be explained by the fact that most medical conditions

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from poor and wrong choices rather than being caused by involuntary

circumistances

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circumstances

.

Therefore

, they should follow a healthier

life style

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such

as consuming lesser proportions of foods that are

fat rich

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,

stop

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smoking and

excersize

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exercise

more.

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, unless Jordanian citizens reduce their obesity, the percentage of diabetic people which is more than 30% is not going

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, especially

amoung

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among

the younger generations. All in all,

indivisuals

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individuals

should be more aware and responsible

of

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their

health

and lead a

non sedentary

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lifestyle.

To sum up

, even though the government policies about

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healthcare

in general

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must

be change

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for the better, the citizens are far more responsible for their

health

and medical outcomes owing to the fact that most diseases

originte

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originate

originated

from eating and consuming harmful food and substances.