Some people say that education and heath care should be the responsibility of the goverment but other thinks that it is the responsibility of the individuals themseves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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staying healthy is one of the most crucial aspects of every developed and civilized society. It is believed by some that the authorities should be responsible for
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education and healthcare
while
others suppose that
this
reposibility
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responsibility
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upon the shoulders of the
indivisuals
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individuals
individual
.
This
essay will discuss both sides of the coin and argue in
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of the latter. On the one hand, the
goverment
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government
should increase
their
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budget for the academic and
health
sectors.
This
is important because, not only are the amounts of
health
facilites
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facilities
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low, but
also
there has been a huge shortage in the number of life science
professional
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in the past decades.
As a consequence
of
this
, if a child was born with a neurological abnormality, he will
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to travel to another city and sometimes abroad in order to find a good and experienced neurosurgeon to perform a
suitalbe
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suitable
surgery. In short, more money should be spent by the
goverment
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government
to build more hospitals and train more physicians and professionals.
On the other hand
, the general populations are
resposible
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responsible
for
thier
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their
general
health
.
This
can be explained by the fact that most medical conditions
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from poor and wrong choices rather than being caused by involuntary
circumistances
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circumstances
.
Therefore
, they should follow a healthier
life style
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such
as consuming lesser proportions of foods that are
fat rich
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,
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smoking and
excersize
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exercise
more.
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, unless Jordanian citizens reduce their obesity, the percentage of diabetic people which is more than 30% is not going
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, especially
amoung
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among
the younger generations. All in all,
indivisuals
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individuals
should be more aware and responsible
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their
health
and lead a
non sedentary
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lifestyle.
To sum up
, even though the government policies about
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healthcare
in general
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must
be change
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for the better, the citizens are far more responsible for their
health
and medical outcomes owing to the fact that most diseases
originte
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originate
originated
from eating and consuming harmful food and substances.
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