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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving chilren this message?

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Some societies told their
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children
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 can have whatever you want if make a lot of effort. the following essay will examine the benefits and drawbacks of
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 notion and provide
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 conclusion. The two main advantages of
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 are
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children
 to be hardworking and
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 them hope to achieve whatever they want.
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,
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young people
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generally
 lazy to do
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 stuff and they don't need to try hard, but if parents persuade them with promising
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 bright future, they
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 attempt hard to reach
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 goals.
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,
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immediate
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give
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 their
children
 hope and noted that, if you
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 a lot, your dreams come true.
For instance
, some
childrean
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children
 have an aspiration to become first in their class ;
therfore
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therefore
, their
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father's
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 and
mothers
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mothers'
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 word make them
to
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do many efforts and eventually rank first in their
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classrooms
 among their peers.
However
,
this
 belief
also
 has some major disadvantages like
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 of youth's
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self-esteem
 and
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 them bored.
children
 who enforced
try
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to try
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 hard to achieve their aims, in case of failing, their confidence may ruin completely.
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, students who make effort hardly all the semester and
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expect to take good grades, have
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a
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great
depression
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 if they fail
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their eams. what's more, inducing
children
 to try tough can be monotonous
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for
 them and make them
to
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quit everything.
this
 is a real danger to
children
 and may demolish their future. to
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conclude
,
although
parents
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 statement can have
certain
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a certain
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 positive effect like
make
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 the
children
 studious and
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 them hope, it has an extremely negative
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influence
 on their self-confidence and
make
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 them bored.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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