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Some people believe that one of the best ways to solve environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt the rate of carbon dioxide has increased in the atmosphere. There
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 who say, the fuels of transportation are a basic factor in rising that toxic gases. The question is, is it necessary to raise the price of fuel to mitigate those toxic gases to preserve the environment or not? In
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 essay, I am going to discuss both views and draw my conclusion. In terms of views, some
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 believe that rising the costs of fuel is important to solve environmental problems. The main reason given to support
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 claim is that the number of
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people
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 who use
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 has increased in developed countries. To illustrate, driving a car significantly results in carbon dioxide which has negative consequences on the environment.
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, there will be a lack of vegetation which contribute to increasing desertification.
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, the level of the water sea will decline gradually.
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 is because rising temperatures of the sun are
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 the death of plants and trees.
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, others strongly believe that there are better solutions
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 than increasing the price of fuels.
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 should be buying
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 driverless.
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, using electric car lead us to reduce the spread of toxic gases.
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 have to use bicycles for short distances which are near their homes.
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, some governments became given subsidies to those industries which produce electric
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. In conclusion,
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 increasing the costs of fuels might reduce environmental problems, using electric vehicles
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 and trucks will solve some of these problems.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • carbon footprint
  • economic incentives
  • alternative energy vehicles
  • fuel-efficient
  • government subsidies
  • economic disparity
  • urban planning
  • rural infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • carbon tax
  • green technology
  • demand elasticity
  • energy conservation
  • climate change mitigation
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