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Unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood, or teaching sports to younger children). To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is often suggested that unpaid
community
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services
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 should be mandatorily added to the curriculum of
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high
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students
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. Personally, I agree that the benefits of
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include effective
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. I will explain my rIt is often suggested that unpaid
community
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services
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 should be mandatorily added to the curriculum of high
school
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students
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. Personally, I agree that the benefits of
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include effective
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 and a better understanding of handling
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. I will explain my reasons in
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 and preparing themselves for enhanced soft
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 university education.
The charity
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 work is the best way to learn
life
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skills
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communication
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students
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 need to interact with all age groups
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people
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and people
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 outside of their circle,
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people
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, teaching sports to kids,
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 with adults, working on improvements etcetera.
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youngsters
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 develop an ability to communicate with various personalities, which is vividly significant for their career growth.
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 is
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 crucial for them to secure a job, as it is a main requirement of most employers.
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students
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 their thoughts on something, and
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severe confusion.
Consequently
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, these kinds of problems enable them to learn about their mistakes and improve them.
Hence
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, developing an understanding is substantial for
youngsters
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. In conclusion, I feel that forcing pupils to perform necessary
community
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services
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 in high
school
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 is paramount as they have become more responsible and talkative. Soft
skills
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 are as essential as
an
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academic
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skill
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skills
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 for younger generations to achieve success in
life
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.
easons
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reasons
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the
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higher secondary
students
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 are at
learning
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the learning
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 stage
,
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apply
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 and preparing themselves for enhanced soft
skills
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, that can be beneficial
further
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 during
the
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their
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 university education.
The charity
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Charity
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 work is the best way to learn
life
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skills
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 like
an
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effective
communication
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.
For example
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,
students
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 need to interact with all age
group
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groups
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people
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 outside of their circle,
while
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 they are performing
community
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 activities,
such
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 as dealing with aged
people
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, teaching sports to kids,
taking
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talking
show examples
 with adults, working on improvements etcetera.
Consequently
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,
youngsters
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 develop an ability to communicate with various personalities, which is vividly significant for their career growth.
This
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skill
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 is
also
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 crucial for them to secure a job, as it is a main requirement of most employers.
Furthermore
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, there are frequent
situations
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 where conflicts can be caused
while
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students
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 are dealing with distinct types of individuals.
For instance
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, a person and
student
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a student
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 cannot be on
a
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the
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 same page, if they have differences
on
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in
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 their thoughts on something, and
such
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situations
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 lead to
a
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apply
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severe confusion.
Consequently
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, these kinds of problems enable them to learn about their mistakes and improve them.
Hence
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, developing an understanding is substantial for
youngsters
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. In conclusion, I feel that forcing pupils to perform necessary
community
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services
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 in high
school
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 is paramount as they have become more responsible and talkative. Soft
skills
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 are as essential as
an
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apply
show examples
academic
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skill
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skills
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 for younger generations to achieve success in
life
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.
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