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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

#illiteracy #concern #countries #world #effects #people #society
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uneducational
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 to be a worry for numerous countries in the
world
 nowadays. I think there are three main causes, and two key impacts, which I will outline now. First of
all
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Education
 and health
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 are important for
people
 to live happily
however
 extremely poor
people
 live where there is no
education
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plenty of
people
 have lived without enough food in the
world
. They are dreaming
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 only one thing
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 is
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food. The main reason for poverty and unemployment.
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world
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different
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a different
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life style
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lifestyle
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that is
strong
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a strong
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 attachment to traditional values and culture.
for instance
, nomadic
people
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always move to another location with family because they are living to connect
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natural phenomena,
as a
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people
who
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cannot learn to
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school
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 zone. Especially teens cannot step forward with other young
people
.
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some
woman
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women
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 have suffered in the
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which
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they
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 can not
to
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join
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education
. Their
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 connected to powerful
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religion. Some
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 not
accepted
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in
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only
women
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education
. Regarding the effects felt by
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poverty,
education
 of discrepancy between
in
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people
. The main impact is unemployment and crime will
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illiteracy of
people
 in society. The employer company requirements to writing language for
people
 but indigent
family
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families
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 unknown the letter. Poor
people
 should understand the writing language priority in
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modern
life
 . exclusive in the disabled
people
 need to
their
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express
yourself
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themselves
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 to others . If poor
people
will be
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 not
changing
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 to
mind
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may
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them
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 continue
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living without
education
.
This
 reason has impacted a badly in society. The other main effect
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 the government
does
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 not attention to
education
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those living
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 in remote
area
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lived
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when living
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countryside
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the countryside
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of
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people
 When asked why children are not enrolling in school they are answered because the school
far
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is far
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 away from
children
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home
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.
Overall
, the causes of
this
 uneducational and poverty and the effects are felt in terms of unemployment and nomadic
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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