Due to the influence of worldwide media such as television and computers, the gap between cultures is decreasing. The introduction of this global culture is a great benefit to the world. To what extent do you agree with this viewpoint?

Modern technology played a crucial role in bringing
world's
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cultures together. The vast majority of
population
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use
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global media to communicate
in
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nowadays,
therefore
, the mixing of cultures is prevalent at the present time.
This
essay, will examine the benefits and drawbacks of cultural integration, and give reasons that make me agree partially with global
culture
. Indeed, the impact of having global
culture
is vital for humanity developing in several ways,
firstly
, ease of communication, when the different nations of the world watch the same movies,series,etc. definitely, that will bring the different viewpoints together,
In addition
, these people will
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by the media language,
hence
, they could communicate without any challenges, as an example, I used to watch TV for lengthy periods, and one day I found my self speak the English language by a simple way.
Furthermore
,
due to
the foundation of global
culture
, humanity will enrich will the
diversity
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contributions of nations in different fields
such
as
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science,art and so on.
for Instance
, in meantime it is so easy to get information from the internet regarding any subject.
On the other hand
, even though all the outstanding benefits that the populations gain through the global media, still there is some detrimental
effect
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. Including losing the native
culture
,
for example
, customs, language, traditional dancing, etc.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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