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What are the differences between working for others and your own business?

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When it comes to discussion most
of
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people
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the people
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 would like to be an entrepreneur , but when it comes down to it , they are often scared by some drawbacks of running their own company.
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 there are some benefits to having an
independed
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independent
 job, I believe that being an employee is more productive for me . There are several reasons why I would argue against running a
business
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by
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 my own.
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, It is true that when you run your own
business
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, you will have much less job security than when you work for someone else's company, or at least until the
business
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 becomes a money
spiner
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spinner
. For me, same as most people, job security is
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an important
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 element to clear my outstanding debts and pay back loans.
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, it is highly likely that when you start to be
a
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 entrepreneur, in the first year or so, couldn't keep a good balance between your work and personal life and you should have
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do
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somethings
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some things
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 which haven't done before.
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, It is often said that learning about lots of subjects, from finance and insurance to Product development and even marketing and
cunsomer
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consumer
customer
servies
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services
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is consider
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 essential, which might take over your personal life.
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, working for a
compony
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company
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 brings some benefits and I should say that the most outstanding one could be that when you work for a company you don't have to be worried about lots of things . Employees are responsible for decisions
which
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 make as opposed to entrepreneurs. They actually are less worried about
costs
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the costs
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behind
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of
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 running a
business
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 which needs
planning
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 finances carefully and
set
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 a realistic budget plan. In conclusion, I do believe that the advantages of being for wage worker do outweigh being
businessman
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a businessman
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 for me.

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