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As countries develop, people tend to buy more and more cars. Do you think the advantages for the individual outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

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Travelling has become easy with the introduction of new transport in society. It is often debated that as countries are growing their requirements to purchase four-wheel vehicles has increased with time.
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, some believe the increased number of
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car is hampering our environment.
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, I would incline toward the statement that as the number of countries is developing the population is increasing which creates a demand to buy a car in the market.
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, big companies like tesla and Maruti are taking initiative towards the ecosystem and making electric vehicles for the ease of the environment.
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, a vehicle can
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