Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion

In order to decline the number of

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, it is still debatable whether criminals should be sent to jail for longer

period

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of time or

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parties should take

another alternative ways

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. In my opinion, using another method will be more effective in reducing

crime

rates,

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which

this

essay is going to elaborate. On one hand,

prison

is particularly effective in reducing

crimes

when it is targeted at serious and repeat offenders. Providing

prison

sentences for a long time will have a deterrent effect on criminals. They will not repeat the

crimes

they committed because they already know how tormented they are living in a

prison

that severely limits their freedom as human beings.

Besides

, if people are imprisoned and educated during their long

prison

term, they will leave

prison

as

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since they have learned something important from jail. Despite the above argument, I strongly believe that opening

job

opportunities should be considerably taken as one of the alternative ways in reducing

crime

. There are motives from perpetrators to launch their actions in doing

crimes

, one of which is

economic

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. Regarding that, by providing as many

job

opportunities as possible, stakeholders can help

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the number of

crimes

because people are able to fulfil their needs on their own since they have a

job

to make money from.

For instance

, a banker, who works in a state-owned enterprise, would not do

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for economic reasons since he/she has a

job

to earn money from to fulfil his/her daily needs. All in all,

although

the two methods above can be applied to reduce the rate of

crime

, I believe that

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creating as many jobs as possible it will be able to reduce the

crime

rate because the most common reason people commit

crimes

is

due to

economic factors.