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1. You are attending a course at an evening school. Write a letter to the director of the school with a complaint about the course. In your letter, you should: – Describe the course you are taking. – Explain what you don’t like about the course. – Give your opinion about what should be done about it.

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Dear Sir, I hope
this
 email finds you in good health and you are doing well. I am writing
this
 email to express some complaints about the evening
course
 that I have been experiencing during the
course
.
Firstly
, I have enrolled in your renowned school for the short-term
course
 on "Strategic Management for Human Resource Professionals". Since I am working in a multinational company, I firmly believe that
this
course
 will help me to enrich my professional knowledge. From the very beginning, I have been enjoying
this
course
 because of the modern learning techniques including the state-of-the-art facilities. But as a part of the
course
 outline, all participants will have to ensure 100% class attendance throughout the
course
 which is really difficult for a professional like me.
However
, I would like to suggest that the authority may rethink
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the class attendance policy considering the practical scenario.
Besides
, every attendee might be allowed for the final examination if his
overall
 class attendance was found in
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 level like 90%. I hope you will consider the above-mentioned suggestion. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Thomas Hook
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Task Achievement
Ensure the letter addresses all the requirements of the task effectively. You could expand on what specifically about the class attendance policy is problematic and offer a more detailed explanation.
Task Achievement
To increase the writing tone suitability, considering using a more formal introduction and closing. For example, use 'Dear Director,' instead of 'Dear Sir,' and consider a more formal sign-off.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the ideas flow logically from one to the next. You've done this well, but reinforcing transitions could enhance clarity even further.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices and paragraphing effectively to structure your letter. Aim for seamless connection between your points for improved reader understanding.
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