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At present, the media affects people’s life significantly. What impact does this have on the society? Is it a positive or a negative development?

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In
this
 today's world, the
media
 plays a vital role in
people
's lives in both beneficial and adverse sides. Squabbling over
media
 is interminable in today's aeon. Controversy exists as to whether it's advantageous or not interpediment to society. In
this
 monograph, I will weigh up both merits and demerits
along with
 my credibility and
thus
 lead to a logical conclusion. There are prolific points to agree with the meritorious side. First of all, with the influence of electronic gadgets,
media
 deliver the news within a fraction of the time to customers. Another positive outlook in
this
 regard is that
people
 are aware of the problems around them.
Furthermore
,
people
 can instantaneously connect with others through text messages. Thanks to
media
, it has a lot of features
such
 as sharing photos, video calls and many more.In short, the inducement of
media
 of its bright side is self-evident.
By contrast
, it's predicted that the throne of the area cannot be neglected. The most worrying aspect is that impact
people
's mental health by hearing horrible news
such
 as rape, and murder through the
media
.In some cases, the
media
 portrays fake news to
people
. Another fact to consider is that affects productivity times, by overuse of the
media
. Based on these points, the pitfall of
media
 in the current generation is lucid. In recapitulation, I reiterate that there
is
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 strong factors supporting that the
media
 indirectly plays a role to protect citizen awareness of issues around the world.
Therefore
, the negative influence cannot be overlooked. Owing to these stated reasons, the pros of
this
 phenomenon overshadow the cons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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