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In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main type of rubbish. They cause water and land pollution, so they should be banned. To what extent do you agree?

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Recently, there is a significant increase in the production of
plastic
bags
 all around the world. Some
argues
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 shopping
bags
 made from
plastic
 should be banned as it contributes to pollution,
while
 others claim they are important for
every day
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everyday
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 uses. In my opinion, the use of
plastic
bags
 should not be encouraged and
this
 essay will discuss the reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin
,
plastic
bags
 have an adverse effect on the ecosystem and biodiversity. Since most plastics are non-biodegradable, it remains in the environment for a long period of time.
Moreover
,
plastic
bags
 are usually thrown away in rivers which poses a great threat
on
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 fishes as they might feed on them. A recent survey,
for example
, showed that there is a 60% increase in water pollution
due to
 inorganic
bags
 thrown into
sea water
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seawater
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 in the
last
 few decades.
Thus
, there is a need to reduce
this
 trend.
Although
plastic
bags
 can be very dangerous for the environment, there are reasons that made
such
 items popular.
Firstly
,
plastic
bags
 can be purchased at a very affordable price. The raw ingredients are easily accessible and
plastic
 factories are quite common in many countries.
Furthermore
,
due to
 their
light weight
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 and flexibility, they are convenient to carry items and groceries in a regular
day to day
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 life. The only way to prohibit the use of these materials is to enforce a strict law which would help reduce the number of carry
bags
. In conclusion, I believe the distribution of
plastic
bags
on
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 shops and markets must be restricted by imposing a fine on the production of these materials. Alternative items
such
 as biodegradable
bags
 should be encouraged to replace
plastic
bags
.
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