Although family has a great influence on children’s life, it is the influence of outside the home that plays a bigger part in their development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The graphs compare the percentage of
households
which own electrical appliances and the amount of time that was dedicated to
housework
in a specific country from 1920 to 2019. The initial expression is that
while
the number of appliances That a household owned increased during the given
period
, the number of
hours
spent on
housework
per week decreased. It can be clearly seen from the figure that each individual household spend 50
hours
on
housework
at the beginning of the
period
and
then
faced a rapid decline of 40
hours
until 1960.
Additionally
, the amount of time that a household allocated to
housework
moderately fell from 20
hours
in 1960 to 10
hours
in 2019.
On the other hand
from 1920 to 1940 the percentage of
households
which owned vacuum cleaners or washing machines witnessed a 10% growth from 20% and 40% respectively in 1980 and
then
had an increase to 60% each until 1960 when the ownership of washing machine dipped at roughly 60% and after that reached just above 70%
at the end
of the
period
.
In contrast
, the number of vacuum cleaners that
households
owned saw a significant growth of 30% in 40 years from 1960 when maintained
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the same level for the rest of the
period
.
In addition
, the percentage of
households
which had a refrigerator noticeably grew from 1920 to 2000 and
then
remained unchanged until 2010.
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