You recently stayed at a hotel and were dissatisfied with the service. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter: •Explain when and where you stayed. •Describe the problems you experienced. •Say what you would like the manager to do.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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letter to express my dissatisfaction with the service that I received at your hotel,
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an action that I request you to take.
Firstly
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, I stayed at your hotel, namely Country Inn, on the 10th of June for a business meeting. Not only had I reserved the table in advance, but I had
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prior
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ordered the food.
Secondly
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, I would like to explain the problems that I faced at your hotel. The table
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that I had reserved
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was dirty and unmanaged.
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, food was served cold to us, which had a very negative impact on my meeting.
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, I would really appreciate it if you could either provide me a refund or offer me another dining option for free.
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would help me to compensate for my loss.
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, I would like to suggest that you could
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train your staff for unpredictable situations like
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to avoid
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chaos. Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to a prompt response and a satisfactory resolution. Yours sincerely, Prabhsimran Kaur.

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task response
For task response: say more about the service problem and how it changed your meeting.
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For task response: be more clear about the place. You say hotel, but the main problem is with dining.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your ideas are in a good order, but some link words are not needed. Keep them simple.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: check small grammar and word form mistakes, because they can make the message less clear.
task response
For task response: you answer all parts of the task.
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For task response: your tone is polite and fits a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: each paragraph has one main idea.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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