The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the modern epoch,
people
are relying on convenience foods to speed up their fast-paced
lifestyle
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.
However
, with every benefit, there is a corresponding disadvantage.
This
essay explains the comparison of the pros and cons of eating fast
food
and
also
sheds light on whether its advantages overshadow the demerits.
To begin
, eating junk
food
have some advantages.
Firstly
, these eatables help
people
who live by themselves to save time and work on other activities. International students, who don’t have anyone to take care of,
can
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easily cook fast
food
items and spend more time on study.
For example
,
according to
a survey in Europe, more than 75% of students consume fast
food
in their daily life.
Secondly
,
people
can access junk
food
easily because of its cheap rates. Every street in Europe
have
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vendors who sell fast
food
items
such
as pizzas, burgers and many more.
On the other hand
, healthy
food
items and vegetables are constantly becoming more expensive and out of the hands of poor
people
. There are many downsides to eating fast
food
as well. In the past decade, there is a global spread of various
health
problems
such
as diabetes, cholesterol, heart
problems
, and obesity. Many young
people
, especially those from ages 25-30 are drastically affected by these diseases.
According to
health
professionals,
such
illness is the result of the widespread consumption of fast
food
. To illustrate, a survey from the
health
department of the USA shows that about 70% of youth is suffered from major heart
problems
with
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cardiac arrest being the most common cause of death.
To conclude
, I must have to accept the fact that
although
junk
food
has eased our daily life,
on the
contrary
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many
health
problems
outweigh their advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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