Having a good university degree guarantees people good job. a To what extent do you agree?

It is argued that completing prestigious
university
course
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provides people
good
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job
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. I totally agree with
this
statement because through
prestigious
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university
you are able to obtain relevant
knowledge
, and you can find some useful
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for your
future
.
Firstly
, completing
good
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university
course
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provides excellent
knowledge
. It means that each
university
has status, and these universities which are on top gained their reputation by giving needed
knowledge
for
future
work.
Moreover
,
theirs
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reputation
also
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formed by the
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of students
which
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have well-paid jobs. Take
for example
Harvard
university
which has the highest rate of employed
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alumni
alumnus
, which are working in prestigious and popular companies
such
as Tesla, Microsoft, Apple,
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etc.
Secondly
, you can find
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helpful
networkings
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in
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the
university
.
This
is to say that founded
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in
university
can provide you
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chance
of
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having
good
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job. Presently, students have a golden chance for their
future
by building strong relationships with other students, who,
for example
, could set up a
succesful
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successful
business in
future
.
For instance
,
government
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employment agency did
a
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rigorous research about Neuralinks' workers, and
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found that almost 30% of employees were familiar with the owner of
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and
other
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20% have relatives or
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relationship chains with its owner, who has a lot of friends and other
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in his student time.
to conclude
, I totally agree with
this
statement because both
of
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the
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useful
knowledge
and helpful relationships are able to be found in
prestigious
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university
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