Some people believe that children that commit crimes should be punished. Others think the parents should be punished instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Nowadays, most
people
think that
children
should be punished when they commit crimes,
while
others believe
parents
should be punished rather than their kids. In
this
essay, I will discuss
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both sides and will
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with
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the latter view. On the one hand,
people
suggest that offspring should be punished
due to
their bad
behaviors
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. In
this
way, they don’t repeat their negative actions.
For instance
, when a child commits a crime
such
as
a
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fighting with peers,
parents
can give
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punishment to their kid, including a restriction
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video games and meeting with peers. When
children
get these types of penalties, they can understand that their
behavior
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was wrong, resulting in
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tend
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to leave these acts behind them.
Also
, little ones can learn their every negative
act
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has some consequences.
On the other hand
, some
people
believe that
parents
should get penalties
due to
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role
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of
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their kids. The
children
spend most of their time with their family members since they
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, and their
parents
become
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characters in their life.
Therefore
, kids tend to imitate their father and mother in terms of their
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and moral values.
For example
, if little one sees that his/her dad
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when arguing with other
people
, they perceive
this
act as
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normal, resulting in
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this
behavior
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. In conclusion,
although
some
people
claim that
children
should get
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penalty
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because of committing crimes, I believe that
parents
have a majority of responsibility
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their kids’
acts
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due to
be
a
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role
model
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in their
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life.
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