Some people believe that countries should invite foreign companies to open their brunches, offices and factories in order to develop their economies. Others think countries should invest in their own companies instead. Discuss both view and give your opinions.

Nowadays, it is believed that many
countries
ought to promote outside
firms
for coming and opening branches, franchises,
agencies
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in order to get
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financial
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, on the other side, an increasing number of people believe that authorities must give tailored
fund
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to their national brands. Personally, I think that national
companies
should be encouraged and funded by
government
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for some root reasons.
In
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commence with, there are some benefits to come foreign
firms
. When they start working demanding country, they are likely to pursue
competitive
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a competitive
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environment
as well as
innovations. Goods can
be compete
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due to
their prices whilst foreign
companies
increasing
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steadily on the rise.
Furthermore
, they can make so many innovations in these
countries
.
Thus
, in
country
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the country
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could be created new technology, and it makes much more
benefit
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to
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developing
countries
.
On the other hand
, it is cited that authorities should
be
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take care of
own
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their own
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companies
. It means that
,
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they have to help them for some
reasons
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reason
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.
Main
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reason is that they can make worldwide national brands. National
companies
that acquire any aid,
such
as
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a license
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license
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that
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related to
decrease
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tax’s
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rate
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or giving fund improve their quality and have a chance to open the world and represent
country
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the country
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and its interests.
Moreover
, goods that are produced by local
firms
should not be obliged to pay
custom’s
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taxes. In
this
case,
price
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the price
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can be set up less than
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the foreigner
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foreigner
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foreign
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ones. That situation
inspire
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authorities to
be tend
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to give financial support to local
firms
,
thus
countries
can perish economically
dependence
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from
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another
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countries
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firms
as well as
vanish to rely on
foreigner
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products. In conclusion, for improving
countries
’ economies, people have opposed opinions related to courage
companies
, I think,
favors
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can be much more if government support their own
firms
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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