some people like to spend their liesure time after work with their coworkers while others like to keep their private life separate from work. Discuss both sides.

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fun time
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the relationships between coworkers who
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purposes
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success, can be
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be fun and
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  • colleagues
  • team-building activities
  • work-life balance
  • socialize
  • networking
  • boundary
  • privacy
  • personal relationships
  • stressful
  • detrimental
  • efficiency
  • distractions
  • professionalism
  • segregation
  • personal time
  • maintain relationships
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