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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living &working in a foreign country.

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Immigration from developing and
The
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Third
 World Countries to developed ones has been a continuing trend since industrialization.
This
 on the
one
 hand brings with it some merits for immigrants, and on the other could give them hard time. When
in
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overseas,
people
 at work can connect with other
people
 from very different backgrounds.
Such
atmosphere
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 opens up opportunities for individuals to experience global citizenship.
This
 paves the way for professional development and reaching key positions in international corporations. They would
also
 stand a better chance when trading in developed countries as they enjoy an open market in many cases.
Such
people
 can enlarge their circle of friends as well. I am still in contact with my yesterday colleagues who are my friends now. Our cultural differences and similarities make the
relation
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 very attractive and funny. On the other side of
this
 coin, there are some drawbacks too.
One
 thing a large number of
people
 living abroad miss is family.
This
 for those having strong bonds with their family can become a never-ending pain. The ones willing to live and work abroad should not
also
 underestimate
language
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 barrier. Even with good command of the local language, there are still words and concepts whose actual meaning would be always vague for a foreigner.
This
 could affect social and professional relations, leaving the
new comer
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 left behind in
conversation
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the conversation
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. By and large,
one
 man`s meat is another man`s poison; it heavily depends on the aim, desire and characteristics of
people
 to determine a point as
downside
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 or upside for them.
One
 might just go through suffering when away from family,
while
 another would become independent when living
this
 way.
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 all the features mentioned above.
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