The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books as they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive high tech media , such as computer software, videos and DVD's . To what extent do you agree or disagree with this segment?

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Public
libraries
should put their main financial, staff and space resources on normal
books
rather than on
those
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expensive devices like computer software or videos. As far as
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am concerned, I agree with
this
point. In recent years,
people
are increasingly willing to gain information from
phone
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or
laptop
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laptops
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as they are convenient and quick.
Unfortunitally
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Unfortunately
, some computer
softwares
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software
or videos
is
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not free to
ues
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use
and some
people
like students can not afford that.
Hence
, it will be very useful and helpful if these
high tech
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media can be found in public
libraries
.
However
, it will cost a lot of money for public
libreries
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libraries
to purchase and maintain
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and
also
more time
on
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stuff
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staff
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training. Generally speaking, public
libraries
do not have strong financial support and
shortage
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of
stuff
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is
also
a common problem for them.
According to
a study in Korea, more than 70%
people
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of people
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are
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still like to read
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paper-based
books
and the majority of visitors
of
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public
libraries
are
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general public like local residents who normally read
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a newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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or some academic
books
.
Therefore
demand
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of
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high tech
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media for these
people
may not high enough to let public
libraries
to
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put their limited money
on
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these devices. In conclusion.
high tech
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media is
bacoming
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becoming
more and more popular but the main goal of public
libraries
should still focus on
meet
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the demand of
general
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the general
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public to provide more
books
to them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • main purpose
  • public libraries
  • limited resources
  • space
  • expensive
  • high-tech media
  • computer software
  • videos
  • DVDs
  • to what extent
  • agree
  • disagree
  • provide
  • variety
  • enhance
  • learning experience
  • allocate
  • cater to
  • needs
  • interests
  • attract
  • increase
  • usage
  • managed efficiently
  • adopt
  • modern technologies
  • balance
  • maximize
  • benefits
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