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Nowadays, there is a serious debate about the growing number of unfit
people
 and those who are overweight. Some individuals believe
sports
 should become obligatory in all educational systems.
While
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 a group of
people
 say that there are many drawbacks to enforcing
sports
 on
students
. I strongly agree with the
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 opinion. On the one hand, some
people
 claim that sport obligation in schools can help to reduce the number of overweight
people
 because doing exercise on a regular basis after a
while
 becomes a habit.
However
, I do not find
this
 argument convincing as, from a social viewpoint, the obligation has many adverse effects on mental health and can cause many mental problems. In my personal experience, when I was in secondary school, one of my classmates was obese, and our teacher forced her to run more than the other
students
.
As a result
, she is currently going to therapy because she suffers from depression and won't be doing
sports
 again.
On the other hand
, a group of
people
 justifiably argue that in order to resolve the obesity issue, should be taken many factors into consideration,
such
 as poor eating habits and genetics and inactivity.
Thus
, only forcing young
people
 to
do
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exercise can not help to reduce the number of
people
 who have overweight. I believe educators should raise public awareness about health problems associated with obesity.
Also
, the government should hold free workshops to promote awareness about workout benefits.
To conclude
, In my view,
students
 should voluntary decision to do
sports
 and school officials should promote awareness about
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 of having activity lifestyle.
Furthermore
, sport compulsory can cause turn away
students
 from workout forever.
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