It is predicted that robots are going to become increasingly important in our lives. How could robots be used in the future? Will this development be a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays, there is a serious debate about the growing number of unfit
people
and those who are overweight. Some individuals believe
sports
should become obligatory in all educational systems.
While
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a group of
people
say that there are many drawbacks to enforcing
sports
on
students
. I strongly agree with the
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opinion. On the one hand, some
people
claim that sport obligation in schools can help to reduce the number of overweight
people
because doing exercise on a regular basis after a
while
becomes a habit.
However
, I do not find
this
argument convincing as, from a social viewpoint, the obligation has many adverse effects on mental health and can cause many mental problems. In my personal experience, when I was in secondary school, one of my classmates was obese, and our teacher forced her to run more than the other
students
.
As a result
, she is currently going to therapy because she suffers from depression and won't be doing
sports
again.
On the other hand
, a group of
people
justifiably argue that in order to resolve the obesity issue, should be taken many factors into consideration,
such
as poor eating habits and genetics and inactivity.
Thus
, only forcing young
people
to
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exercise can not help to reduce the number of
people
who have overweight. I believe educators should raise public awareness about health problems associated with obesity.
Also
, the government should hold free workshops to promote awareness about workout benefits.
To conclude
, In my view,
students
should voluntary decision to do
sports
and school officials should promote awareness about
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of having activity lifestyle.
Furthermore
, sport compulsory can cause turn away
students
from workout forever.
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