Some people think that environment problems should be solved on global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Ecological problems is been increasing rapidly throughout the
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and it needs to be handled with appropriate steps. Some people believe that it should be addressed globally
while
others
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the statement saying it needs to look
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a national
issue
. In my
opinion
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I believe addressing the ecological problems nationally would be much more progressive than
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it
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as
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globally.
Firstly
handling the ecological concerns nationally would be more appropriate because as a nation it will be amendable for the things related to these
issues
like sanctioning
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of industrial factories. Which are the major source of causing these
issues
by not following the government rules and regulations related to the environment.
In addition
to these, pollutions caused by the numerous automobile usage in
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urban areas are
also
one of the reasons for the cause. As a solution governance should
issue
strict policies like each family should uphold only two
automobile
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instead
of having each for a family member and
also
separate monitoring team and new threshold values
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to be drawn for the wastages produced by the industries. In
this
way
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nation
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would be having more control over the ecological causes.
Secondly
controlling the
issues
of
environment
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globally is
also
possible but that would be more challenging
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to the nationwide.
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causes
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of these
issues
and
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awareness
in
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the
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society by a single authority would be difficult.
On the other hand
gathering information that
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these
issue
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from each nation will be missing
few
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of the important details
this
is
due to
the lack of local control over the particular nations. And finding the resolutions for
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issue
which lacks
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information would make
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in
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succeeding
objectives
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the objectives
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of resolving
the
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ecological problems.
To conclude
although
environment
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issues
can be handled globally, it is still not an appropriate idea. So, in my
opinion
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it would much better to be handled
as
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it as
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a nationwide
issue
.
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