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Young people are often influenced by their peers.Do the advantages of pressure outweigh the disadvantages.

#people #peers #pressure
It is
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well known
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well-known
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 topic that
tension
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of
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between
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peers
common
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is common
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 among
younger
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the younger
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 generation throughout the world.
As a result
 of psychological and physiological changes which occur in
this
 age group ,youth individuals tend to believe their friends
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more than
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parents
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their parents
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,teachers and relatives.
Although
 there are advantages and disadvantages
of
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this
 phenomenon,
according to
 my opinion benefits always outweigh the disadvantages of peer pressure.
Firstly
,young individuals get
chance
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a chance
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 to spend most of their time with friends in
schools
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school
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.
Due to
that
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,that
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 they try to enjoy things together and gain experiences
while
 paying attention to others.
For instance
 , young people in European countries like to arrange parties with
peers
 which
lead
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leads
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 them to gain good experience
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 event management.
In addition
 to that ,nowadays we can watch many reality programmes on television which are targeted youth.From these events
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they have got
chance
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a chance
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 to improve their talents.Many people attend to them as groups and
peers
 are always welcomed by organizing bodies.So young ones can attain lots of benefits like presentation abilities,can develop personality etc.
On the other hand
,as young people trust
peers
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their peers
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 there is a possible chance to misbehave.
For example
,they try to have cigarettes,alcohol and other addictive substances together.
This
 is the major disadvantage of
peers
 and can lead to disaster.So parents and other relatives should pay adequate pressure to avoid these things
while
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good side of having friends. To summarize ,I would like to tell
peers
 are essential but we have to maintain proper relationships with them.
Although
 there are pros and cons ,
pros
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the pros
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on
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of
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 peer pressure overweigh the cons on it.
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