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Give detail information about the crimes in the newspaper and on television has the bad consequences.Some suggest that govenment should impose some restrictions.To what extent you agree or disagree.

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It is said that detailed reporting of heinous criminal activity
such
 as murder, rape, abduction and riots has a negative impact. Some people are of the opinion that
such
 reports should be censored. I am in total disagreement with the same, and in my essay ,I shall explain the same in detail with relevant examples. First and foremost, it is worthy to state that, the press is considered an important pillar of a free regime. Regulating information feeds, under some pretext or another , will lead to a situation, where the media turns into an administrative mouthpiece. Imposing restrictions will impede, the free flow of news that the population rightly deserves.
For example
, in North Korea, the censorship of broadcasts has affected the freedom of the press in the country.
Further
 examples can be found in Bangladesh, where information on communal riots is censored by the authority.
Moreover
 ,it is
also
 important to note that media work as the values and voice of society and reporting of offence, often leads to the mobilisation of public opinion, consequentially, leading to remedial action from the authorities. It is relevant to cite the Nirbhaya rape case reported in New Delhi, India , which resulted in mass outrage and compelled the police to take immediate action against the criminals.
Similarly
, accurate reporting of gun incidents in America has contemplated the government to amend laws. If reporting of crime is suppressed, there is a possibility of administrative inaction which in turn ,would lead to an increase in the crime rate. Conclusively, it could be rightly deduced, that freedom of expression in regard to crime news, is in the best interest of society and it has an important role to play in remedial action. Regulating information is not the best way to prevent the occurrence, in fact to the contrary it helps to reduce the frequency.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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