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Fewer and fewer people want to become teachers especially in secondary schools. Why this happening and what can be done to tackle this problem?

#people #teachers #schools
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Nowadays there are fewer people that want to become
teachers
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specially
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 in High school. The problem of being a
teacher
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 in
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 century is mainly caused by inflation and moderate income
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 to not having prospect support from the government and other organizations which can result in
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a problematic and troublesome future for mankind. The main part of
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 problem comes back to
teachers
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 and their personal feeling toward their job and
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 their lives which affect directly the children that learn so many mental and moral lessons from their
teacher
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’s mood and behaviours.
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, a devastated and unhappy
teacher
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 with so many
problems
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 and issues
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 money
problems
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 only will influence someone in a challenging way. The first solution is mainly facing government organizations to provide better life-supporting programs for
teachers
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 to make them feel safe with their future plans
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, the authorities can raise the income of the
teachers
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 which has a profound influence on their life and lifestyle to attract people to like to be in that position too. Another solution is for the governments to supervise a strict plan for evaluating the life and mental condition of any
teacher
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 in any grade to know exactly what they are struggling with and facing in their personal lives and come up with solutions or answers to those
problems
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.
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, when they face a
teacher
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 with difficulties, they can check their surroundings like the relationship with their coworkers, the relation and the feeling of their students and so on which will help them to come up with the best solutions for their
problems
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 with their special resolution for any individual like giving the
teachers
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 big loans with the smallest amount of interest. In conclusion, for making people love to become a
teacher
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 these days and make them believe that
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 path can be good for them, their families and their future there is a need for big organizations and governments to be aware of their needs and make their life easier and make them a priority for any society.
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