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is it important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages ?

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Taking
risks
 has been considered a mark of courage and bravado in our history, taking
risks
 amplifies one's ability to take action as we should face all our fears in life. I believe the advantages of taking
risks
 far outweigh the disadvantages. Accounting for the philosophy behind taking
risks
 and the neurological aspects will denote the advantages.
Firstly
, it has been observed that
people
 who take
risks
 personally and professionally have achieved tremendous success as compared to their peers who fail to take them.
For instance
, the
people
 who take the
risks
 of presenting their unique ideas are often appalled for thinking differently.
whereas
 the
people
 who fear resentment will always choose a non-risky path which will always put them behind the curve of learning the other side of the story, and no
risks
 can lead to growth prevention in terms of learning and experiences.
Secondly
, the research has proven that most
people
 who ought to take
risks
 have a larger frontal cortex in their brains than
people
 who don't. Every act of courage sends a signal to our nervous system that our capacity to hold fears has been increased and
thus
 provides us with the ability to be more emotionally stable in chaotic situations. The science of risk-taking has defined that the human brain is susceptible to overcoming fears by taking action. In conclusion, risk takers are often awarded in society for their achievements over their peers who could not take it. Risky Endevours often show us a wide spectrum of possible events.
Thus
, taking
risks
 has more advantages than disadvantages and
according to
me
Add a comma
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 it is really important for
people
 to take more
risks
 in life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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