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The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her. Write a letter to Chris’s parents. In your letter, say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party explain why you won’t be able to attend the party give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time

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Dear Aunty and Uncle, I'
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 so glad, that you invited me
for
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 Chris's 18th birthday party. Chris is a
kind hearted
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kind-hearted
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 boy who
love
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 little things,
such
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 as surprise parties, gifts, small
talks
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talk
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 and many more. He will surely get surprised
,
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 because he will never think that you will throw a
gaththering
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gathering
 for his
specail
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special
day
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. I'
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 sure
this
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 will be a memorable
day
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for
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 his life. But I'
m
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 sorry, I will not be able to make it. Because I have an exam to attend
at
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 the same
day
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. I Spoke to the examination department to get an
extention
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extension
. But it didn't work as I'
m
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 too late to submit the request. Anyway, I'll
definitly
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definitely
 come to your place and take him out
for
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a
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spend the
day
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. There is a boutique near my home, which is
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extremely beautiful, calm and quiet place to relax. Chris will love to spend
the
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time there. I'
m
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planing
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planning
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 to book the place
on
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next
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 week.
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Moreover
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this
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 will be my birthday gift for him.
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 kindly excuse me for
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 time. Hope you will forgive me for not coming. Best regards Sanka Viraj
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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