Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (eg medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, Consumerism becomes the most
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topic among
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people
. In their daily life, they buy different kinds of things which they use to ease their lifestyle.
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people
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such
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important thing
that is
widely come
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consideration. I
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with
this
statement. First of all,
People
always watch their
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while
spending money on some
product
.
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product
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products
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out of their approach
then
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heavy debt which will cause them depression and anxiety.
According to
the survey, India has high
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suicide
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attempted because
people
failed to
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debt. Spending money wisely is important to live happily.
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, Inflation becomes
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major concern
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society
due to
which
people
buy their essentials first and stay
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their budget.
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to
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, in the market
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variety
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of products which has
same
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features and
people
can buy them by comparing
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them at
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different prices. So,
people
always try to stay
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their budget to reduce the effect of inflation on them and buy
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a product
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product
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products
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after considering their
price
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prices
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from different websites.
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, 90%
people
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belongs
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to
middle class
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families so
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of
product
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is
most
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important key
while
purchase
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. Even when I purchase anything
firstly
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price
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and
then
other features and qualities. So,
Price
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tag becomes important in consumerism
thats
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that's
that
why stores provide different discounts to their
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customers
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.
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