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Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (eg medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

#people #price #product #cell #phone #service #eg #treatment
Nowadays, Consumerism becomes the most
favorable
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 topic among
the
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people
. In their daily life, they buy different kinds of things which they use to ease their lifestyle.
While
 buying,
people
 consider various
factor
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factors
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such
 as quality, features etc, but
price
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the price
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 tag is
most
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a most
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 important thing
that is
 widely come
in
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into
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 consideration. I
am completely agree
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completely agree
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 with
this
 statement. First of all,
People
 always watch their
pocket
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pockets
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while
 spending money on some
product
.
Reason
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 behind
this
 is that if they buy
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the product
a product
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product
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products
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 out of their approach
then
 they can come
under
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into
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 heavy debt which will cause them depression and anxiety.
According to
 the survey, India has high
sucide
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suicide
 rates
due to
 depression which
were
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 attempted because
people
 failed to
payoff
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pay off
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the
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their
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 debt. Spending money wisely is important to live happily.
Moreover
, Inflation becomes
the
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 major concern
among
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in
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 society
due to
 which
people
 buy their essentials first and stay
in
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within
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 their budget.
Addition
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 to
this
, in the market
their
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 are
variety
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a variety
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 of products which has
same
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the same
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 features and
people
 can buy them by comparing
at
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them at
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 different prices. So,
people
 always try to stay
in
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within
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 their budget to reduce the effect of inflation on them and buy
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a product
the product
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product
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products
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 after considering their
price
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prices
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 from different websites.
Overall
, 90%
people
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of people
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belongs
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belong
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 to
middle class
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middle-class
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 families so
price
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the price
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 of
product
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the product
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 is
most
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the most
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 important key
while
purchase
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. Even when I purchase anything
firstly
 I look at
price
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the price
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 and
then
 other features and qualities. So,
Price
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the Price
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 tag becomes important in consumerism
thats
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that's
that
 why stores provide different discounts to their
costumers
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customers
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.
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