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What are the advantages and disadventages of the increasing use of technology?

#disadventages #technology
I agree with the given statement,
this
 is because
technology
 has more positive effects than negatives. I believe that without technological gadgets would not be prosperous the countries as it is today in mankind
life
.
Initially
 using
of
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technology
 affects everyone's
life
 in some way.
Life
 would be impossible without
technology
.
This
 is because everyone
depend
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 on it.
The gadgets
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gives
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give
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variety
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a variety
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opportunity
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of opportunity
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 for mankind
life
.
For instance
,
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to communicate
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communicate
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 with someone
and
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 corner of the
world
,
technology
 has made
tremendously
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 devices in healing
people
,
such
 as deaf
people
 can hear,
dumb
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and dumb
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people
 can speak.
Furthermore
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 today
technology
 is everywhere. Nowadays students compose their presentations for the classroom,
whiteboard
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 and others. Wikipedia
well known
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 program considering over the
world
.
This
 is because regarding
source
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the source
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 of
variety
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various
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 information in my personal perspective. In my opinion disadvantages of using
technologies
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technology
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 have a range type of reasons.
Firstly
 modern technologies cause very
lazy
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laziness
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of
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in
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 humanity. Alternatively,
big
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a big
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 part of western
people
suffer
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 from
overweight
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being overweight
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.
Secondly
, industry and
number
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a number
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 of industrial technologies simultaneously developing, in spite of
this
improving
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improvement
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, really impacting
to
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our environment. Erosing the layer of
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 by air pollution and
increase
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increasing
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number
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the number
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 of robots caused unemployment the
people
. And
this
 is spontaneously disposing change the climate, nowadays
world
 of population reached 8 billion. And
this
originate
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originates
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 deforestation
for
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to
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take
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taking
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a wood
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wood
a block of wood
a plank of wood
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 and open new locations for
people
's House. All in
all
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,all
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 in
this
world
, everything
have
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has
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 got advantages and disadvantages sides.
Actually
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 it
is depends
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depends
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 on themselves. If
the
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people
 visit any type of site or program with
exact
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 aim,
then
 they
are reach
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 their dream. Of course, for that
everyday
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 should do that.
That is
 why we should concentrate focus only
our
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on our
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 future lifestyle
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