The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph demonstrates the average monthly temperatures with the average number of
hours
of sunshine yearly in three major cities.
Overall
, we can see two similar patterns for both New York
and London
with cold winter and hot summer, while
Sydney is almost the opposite.
Looking at the details, Sydney has the warmest climate at the begening
of the year with 25 Correct your spelling
beginning
degrees
then
it starts to drop gradually in Mars leveling
off at just over 15 Change the spelling
levelling
degrees
in July. Afterward
, the temperature Change the spelling
Afterwards
witnesses
a steady rise to Wrong verb form
witnessed
warmer
climate in December at 25 Add an article
a warmer
the warmer
degrees
.
On the other hand
, London
and new
Change the capitalization
New
York
has
Change the verb form
have
a
cold winter with temperature ranging from just under 10 Correct article usage
apply
degrees
to nearly 5 degrees
, wich
is the coldest weather in the graph in New Correct your spelling
which
York
.
Noticeably, both lines start to increase significantly in the summer peaking at just under 25 degrees
and nearly 30 degrees
for London
and New York
respectively. Then
the weather gets cooler in the winter decreasing the temperatures to their initial figures between 5 and 10 degrees
.
From the table, New York
city
has the highest number with 2535 Change the capitalization
City
hours
of sunshine annually which explains it's
warm summer.
Sydney has ranked second place with 2473 Correct your spelling
its
hours
this
was followed by
London
with the shortest period of 1180 hours
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