The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph demonstrates the average monthly temperatures with the average number of
hours
of sunshine yearly in three major cities.
Overall
, we can see two similar patterns for both New
York
and
London
with cold winter and hot summer,
while
Sydney is almost the opposite. Looking at the details, Sydney has the warmest climate at the
begening
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beginning
of the year with 25
degrees
then
it starts to drop gradually in Mars
leveling
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off at just over 15
degrees
in July.
Afterward
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, the temperature
witnesses
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a steady rise to
warmer
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a warmer
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climate in December at 25
degrees
.
On the other hand
,
London
and
new
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York
has
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a
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apply
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cold winter with temperature ranging from just under 10
degrees
to nearly 5
degrees
,
wich
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is the coldest weather in the graph in New
York
. Noticeably, both lines start to increase significantly in the summer peaking at just under 25
degrees
and nearly 30
degrees
for
London
and New
York
respectively.
Then
the weather gets cooler in the winter decreasing the temperatures to their initial figures between 5 and 10
degrees
. From the table, New
York
city
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has the highest number with 2535
hours
of sunshine annually which explains
it's
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its
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warm summer. Sydney has ranked second place with 2473
hours
this
was followed by
London
with the shortest period of 1180
hours
.
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