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In some countries, there is not enough recycling of waste materials (e.g. paper, glass and cans). What are the reasons and solutions?

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Nowadays,
the
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recycling and
wastd
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waste
wasted
materials
 are not dealt with properly in some countries. There are many reasons and solutions behind
this
phenonema
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phenomena
. The main cause of
this
 situation is the lack of
the
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public awareness
in
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of
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 the importance of recycling useful
materials
. The large
quantity
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 of
waste
materials
are
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 not
well separated
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base
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 on their kinds.
For example
, people usually will put paper, glass and cans directly
in to
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 bins without thinking twice.
This
 will result in only
few
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 of these
materials
are
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 recycled. The other reason is regulations on businesses may not
adequately
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 developed. Many huge businesses do not wish to handle their
waste
materials
. Because sometimes, the cost to set
a
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department in dealing with
there
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their
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wastes
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waste
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 is
lager
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larger
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 than not, which will make firms reluctant to put
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efforts
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. As for the solutions, the first one is
let
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government
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the government
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to
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improve the public awareness of the necessity to deal with re-useful
waste
. The
government
 can print
brouchers
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brochures
,
advertise
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and advertise
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 on
televisons
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television
televisions
 about the
important
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 to separate
waste
.
Also
, the
government
 should prepare a wider range of available bins to give
puipls
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people
 space to put their recyclable
litters
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 in. Apart from that,
government
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the government
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 should provide some financial aid and legal punishments
toward
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 the businesses. By doing so, the cooperations have more intensive to purchase more recycled
waste
 and use
in
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 their production.
Also
, if they do not deal with their
waste
 properly, they will get punished. In conclusion, there are many causes for not enough recycling of
waste
 material, with
government’s
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the government’s
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interven
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intervene
,
this
 issue can be alleviated.
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