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Children educating is expensive. In some countries, the government pays partly or all education fees. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#children #countries #government #education #fees
Now a days
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 education is
being
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unaffordable in
few
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a few
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 nations but
regime
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providing
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 help to pay
study
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for study
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 expenses which is
very
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appriciatable
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appreciable
appreciatable
 step for
growth
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 and development of
certain
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the certain
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country
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countries
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, we cannot neglect some drawbacks which we will discuss in upcoming paragraphs. First and foremost thing is that countries are playing
crucial
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 role to promote
the
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development in
positive
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 manner . The
people
 who are unable to pay
high
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 fees of colleges and universities but on that point of level government always
stand
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 behind
of
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their individuals as
bridge
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a bridge
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 to make a building .
Furthermore
, students who are poor , can
fulfill
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 their dreams and set an example for those who always make
an excuses
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excuses
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 that poverty
as
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is
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genetically
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. If higher authorities
helps
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 the
people
 to get more knowledge , new world formation is possible at any rate and nobody can stop to make
better
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 future.
for instance
 , Schools and universities can arrange or
anounce
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announce
the
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awards for students who attain good marks.
However
, Some
of
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countries
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the countries
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has
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 been paying full tuition fees which
not
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 good for them because they will make helpless and not try to achieve good positions. They will not feel any difference between awards and help.
On the other hand
,
Government
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the Government
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 have been making
people
 so useless ,
instead
 of
this
 they can allow the students to do
part time
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part-time
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 work so they can earn something. They will tackle
with
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apply
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new troubles on daily basis. In the
nut shell
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nutshell
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,
Although
this
 is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of
government
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the government
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 to create
better
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a better
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 future
of
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for
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 their native
people
 rather than
this
 they can encourage the student to do
part time
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part-time
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 jobs to give them more flexible and solvable
tommorow
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tomorrow
.
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