It is important for people to take risks, both in their personal lives and professional lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages

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Individuals should take
risks
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in their lives.Because it helps to gain
self confidence
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and mental health.
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However
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there are several drawbacks as well. I believe taking risky
desicions
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decisions
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advantages
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than disadvantages.
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with, There are plenty of
advantages
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. Taking
risks
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will help to gain your confidence to another level.
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, I left my job in 2020 during
pandemic
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the pandemic
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situation. The reason to resign is, I already had a startup.
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I wanted to develop my own business. They offered
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allowance for resigning.
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I saw the opportunity and took the risk.
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it will help you to reduce your work stress or personal life stress.
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, one of my friends had a toxic relationship with a girl. she has always
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him saying, she will die if he left her.
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this
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reason
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he was depressed.
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he has taken the decision to break up. Now both of them are happy as he took the correct
desicion
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decision
at the correct time.
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I think it's extremely valuable to take
risks
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in your day-to-day life.
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, The main advantage is, you cannot 100% predict the future. Sometimes the decision you made will lead you to suffer for a certain time. But
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you will be back to normal.
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, one of my friends lost his job
last
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year,
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he planned on migrating. He has paid 25laks for an agent. But
unfortunately
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he lost the money. He suffered
alot
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a lot
but he didn't give up. He searched for more options.
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finally
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he was able to migrate to Canada through the Express Entry program. In conclusion,
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essay discussed the
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of taking
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. it is true the
advantages
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outweigh it drawbacks.
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