Some people believe that it is a good idea for young people to take a year off to travel or work between high school and university. Others say it is better for students to go straight on to university after graduating from high school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays numerous teenagers take
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year
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between university and
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. Some people believe that it is advantageous for youngsters.
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others say that it is not
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way and enter straightly
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university is
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way. In my opinion, taking
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year
is one of the best
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themselves for students. So
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a
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is helpful for students. Most
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teenagers
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the teenagers
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do not know themselves and mostly choose their occupations wrongly. And
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the taking
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can solve
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